Monday, June 20, 2016

Magic Tree House-Sunset of the Sabertooth, Chapter 5 - 6,

Magic Tree House-Sunset of the Sabertooth,  Chapter 5 - 6,  


Background reading

Questions

Why did ancient people paint pictures
of animals on the walls?

Who do Annie and Jack have to find?

What are the dangers of being in the Ice Age? 

What type of people lived at that time? 

What type of food did they eat? 

How did they cook the food? 

What clothes did they wear? 




Homework: 

Look at the background links,  Write a post that you could put on a social
 networking site about a vacation that you "went on" to one of these sites and what you saw in one of these prehistoric caves.   Fill in the blanks with your own words!  


Here is the beginning done for you: 

Hi Everyone!  

I just came back from _____________________,  in ___________________.

Wow it was ______________.

The ________________ people painted on the cave walls!  ______________


We saw ______________________, _______________________ and

______________________________.   


It was very interesting that they painted with _______________________.  

But why did they paint inside?  Maybe they also painted outside the caves too? 

My favorite painting is _________________________.  

Next time come with me! 











Tuesday, June 7, 2016

FreeWriting Improve the Introduction

When we free write we don't really pay attention to the structure.  Now however, we are going to take the introduction and rewrite it.

This is the original text:
I am sooooo angry at Google! yes Google.  They have this nifty program called Google docs.  And if you create your own documents in their system you can have as much storage as you want!!  So I created a lot of files that I use everyday.  Word documents and spreadsheets.  I use these a lot and I am constantly doing updates and changing them to get the most up to date infomattion on them. 


Now what can we do to improve this?  First we have to decide what tone we want.  Is it an infomal, or formal?  What audience do we have in mind?  Who is going to be interested in this subject?

Well, I want this to be an informal blog post.

Do I really want the word soooooo?

Maybe yes, but I also notice a spelling mistake at the end.  So I will correct that.
My first sentence is very strong, but then the rest is not.  I am going to take out the extra exclamation points, and fix the run on sentences.   Take out the word so, it is too informal, Change the simple past tense to the Present Perfect, which implies that this process has been going on for a while.
Combine the two sentences ( So I created a lot of files that I use everyday.  Word documents and spreadsheets. ) into one .  Doing updates and changing them is really the same action,  Which one to choose?  Updating is more precise.  I now have the same information but with less wordiness. Is something changed?  Yes.  I have changed the tone of the introduction.  Now I need a sentence at the end to connect it with the next paragraph to say why I am angry.  
There now there is a concluding sentence and I would be ready to go on to the next paragraph.  

Spaces after the period. In the old days we were told to put two spaces. Now one space is enough. You can still put two if you want to. But if you don't put any at all then it is a mistake. 

Should I keep the first sentence?  Maybe I should change it to the title.
Then the first sentence would be about Google Docs itself.

!st Draft

I am so Angry at Google!

They have this nifty program called Google docs.  If you create your own documents in their system you can have as much storage as you want!  I  have created word processing documents and spreadsheets that I use everyday.  I am constantly updating the information.   If this system worked as it was intended, then I would not have any problems.  But, there is a big problem.  







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Rachael   Alice

Wednesday, June 1, 2016

Freewriting - English writing class

Freewriting is a useful tool in the English writing classroom. Set a topic that you want to write about and set your timer on the phone and type away until it dings. Try to choose a topic that you are passionate about so that you can generate a lot of ideas.  Don't pay attention to spelling and grammar or even organization. Just get as many ideas as you can.

Get ready
Get set
Go

3 minute Freewrite:

I am sooooo angry at Google! yes Google.  They have this nifty program called Google docs.  And if you create your own documents in their system you can have as much storage as you want!!  So I created a lot of files that I use everyday.  Word documents and spreadsheets.  I use these a lot and I am constantly doing updates and changing them to get the most up to date infomattion on them.

Well, let me tell you.  DON"T!  this program has wasted untold amounts of time.  All the word documents that I create and use, well they get corrupted.  The changes are not there. Parts are missing.
There is the same problme with the spreadsheets.  I make changes, I make up a special calendar for myself, and it is messed up.

Next blog post we will go through how to refine this essay and make it better!
Do your own 3 minute Freewrite in the comments section!

Good luck,
Rachael Alice

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